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11  03 2007

Stillness in verse

Week 41; Haiku at One Deep Breath



All is still
when illusion is known
truth a green leaf



Sitting in silence
Ten toes dangle wet
Golden fish tickle




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14 Responses to “Stillness in verse”

  1. Brian, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 8:39 am


    Very calming Ron. I can feel the cool liquid and the falling leaves.

  2. 1blkquill, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 9:54 am


    You out done yourself with this one. I simply love it! I can feel it, breath it, and enjoy the tranquility of the moment….wonderfully expressed!

  3. hundred and one, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 10:11 am


    I love the second one!

  4. Crafty Green Poet, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 10:17 am


    The second of these reminds me of sitting by Lake Malawi, with my toes in the rock pools and the fish nibbling… Lovely memories, thanks for reminding me

  5. Elspeth, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 10:20 am


    Simple and sensual

  6. Regina Clare Jane, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 11:35 am


    These were just lovely- the second reminds me of dipping my toes in the ocean…
    Thank you…

  7. Patricia (a/k/a Roswila), Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 1:03 pm


    That second one is particularly good, IMHO. My feet itch right now for that water and those tickles. :-)

  8. Colorful Prose, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 3:32 pm


    The second is my favorite, too.

  9. Get Zapped, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 3:43 pm


    I like what you captured with these. I feel mellow ;)

  10. ronrusso, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 6:47 pm


    Thanks everyone who honored me with your comments.
    It looks like #2 is the clear winner! And I agree. You all know how it is trying to throw something together on relatively short notice. I usually work on poems for weeks. There are a few I’ve been working on for years and may never finish…
    Again, thanks

  11. Jone, Said:
    on March 13th, 2007 at 11:09 pm


    I like the idea of goldfish nibbling.

  12. ronrusso, Said:
    on March 14th, 2007 at 7:14 am


    This being a Japanese form and style of writing I thought the nibblers should be of the goldfish/carp type commonly found in a koi pond to sort of go along with the theme.
    thanks, jone

  13. AnnieElf, Said:
    on March 18th, 2007 at 7:42 pm


    Words, music, and images make a perfect blend. I feel the nibble of those golden fish.

  14. ronrusso, Said:
    on March 18th, 2007 at 9:47 pm


    Thanks, AnnieElf.
    I forget about the music. I need to get new tunes. I turn it off after awhile…heard them all.

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